Weekend Writing Warriors #9 – Revenant (Part 48)

Hello there weekenders, another Sunday is upon us and once again I will be continuing with Revenant. As before, this snippet follows on immediately after last week. If you want to refresh your memory about what’s happened you can simply follow this link.

    The building’s main doors caught his eye and, activating the visor’s zoom feature, Ryan focused in on them. A chain had been wrapped tightly through the handles to keep the doors from opening. Looking closer, he saw signs of violence on the doors and adjacent windows. This building had definitely been swarmed, but years ago judging by the piles of leaves against the glass.
    “What’re you looking at?” Kassandra said.
    “The door’s been secured with a chain,” he pointed out. “That means people must have taken refuge in here, and where once were people… ”
    “Now there are husks.”

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13 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors #9 – Revenant (Part 48)”

  1. Husks! Oh how I love that imagery. If I had one comment about something that tweaked me it would be the “Kassandra queried” bit. Really, it all depends on your editor but I’ve always been told to keep it simple when it comes to dialog tags. Best not to use them at all unless you have to, and in this case, it was certainly necessary so my only comment would be to keep them as simple as possible. That comes from every editor I’ve ever worked with. Personally, I dig variety.

    1. simplicity restored. 🙂 Thanks for the feedback, I too have heard the same regarding dialog tags but sometimes it gets a bit repetitive to use said all the time, but still you are quite right; simple is best.

  2. I LIKE IT! Terrific scene-building, details and way to build of tension for this very palpable place. Nicely done!

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