Six Sentence Sunday #48 – Revenant (Part 28)

Well I forgot to set the alarm and ended up registering late so am languishing down in the hundreds. Must make a better effort next week. Kassandra continues her slow return to consciousness, probably feeling like she would have preferred to have stayed in stasis.

These six sentences pick up immediately following last week’s six, so if you want to catch up or need a recap then just follow this link.

Here we go…

    He reached across her to adjust the flow on one of the many tubes then sat beside the bed wearing what she imagined was his version of a reassuring smile.
    “If you don’t mind, I’ll begin with a bit of history while we wait for the medication to wear off enough for you to ask questions. It is the 9th of April in the year 2467, and you are on Purgatory Station. It would have been called Haven at the time of your departure, but a lot has changed since then. Your ship, and all surviving crew have been placed in quarantine pending a thorough evaluation of their condition. I expect that quite a few of them will have to be euthanized but some, like you, are showing promising signs.”

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8 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday #48 – Revenant (Part 28)”

  1. Purgatory Station sounds creepy! I got goosebumps. I like how you have him informing her, nice way to let your readers discover along with his dialogue.

    1. Thank you… I do need a way for readers to learn what happened without it coming across as an info dump… a conversation like this is my solution to that. Just need to make sure it really reads like a conversation 🙂

  2. I like it, but it doesn’t give us much of a sense of our narrator. Have you tried putting her reactions to it between the lines? Like to the date, the fact that there’s a quarantine. It’s good, but it could be better.

    1. Thanks for the feedback. You are quite right, her reactions are important to capturing the mood. I will definitely be including these in future weeks.

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