Six Sentence Sunday #37 – Revenant (Part 17)

It’s Sunday and that means it is once more time for six sentences from Revenant, my ongoing Six Sunday Science Fiction Serial. For the past 17 weeks I have been sharing this story with six sentences at a time and I hope that you’re not groing bored of seeing Ryan’s progress through the derelict ship. I hope not, because I’m not getting bored of writing it and besides… things are just about to get really interesting ๐Ÿ˜‰

As always, this scene picks up immediately following last week’s six sentences, so if you want to catch up or need a recap then just follow this link.

Here it is…

    His target supposedly rested in cryo-chamber 207, roughly fifty metres from the door in front of him. The computer showed that the doctorโ€™s chamber remained functional, with all readings within normal operational parameters.
    He lifted the rifle to his shoulder, and took several calming breaths. From here on in, every shot was critical, just one stray plasma blast and the entire mission could be blown. The future of the entire human race hinged upon the next few seconds.
    โ€œDonโ€™t fuck this up,โ€ he said, as he opened the door.

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15 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday #37 – Revenant (Part 17)”

  1. eeee, this story has built and built over the weeks and I’m getting desperate to read on.

    If you don’t finish it before the end of January we’ll have to set up an alternative – Son of Six Sunday or something. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Terrific 6.

  2. Goran, this is great. And the tension is terrific.

    To make it a little more spell binding, I suggest what I call “de-wasifying”: “His target supposedly rested in cryo-chamber…” and “showed the doctor’s cell remained functional, and all readings registered within normal operating parameters.”

    Using more active verbs tightens your hold on us as the readers. ๐Ÿ™‚ Great six. ๐Ÿ™‚

  3. I can’t tell you how much I look forward to Ryan’s ongoing story each week, and you didn’t let me down. The tension is terrific. (The only thing missing is a trickle of sweat, frustrating in his inability to wipe it away.) Is his search over? Or is this another dead end? Are there husks between him and the salvation of mankind? Next Sunday won’t come soon enough!

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